Wk:7 The Jail Break

One day I got in a fight. The guy was drunk. I punched him and he hit his head and died. I went to prison.I was sentenced to lifetime in prison. One day there was a riot on my floor.I made a break for the stairs. They sent guards after me.As the door slammed,I knew the guards were on the stairs. So I stopped at the fourth floor until they passed. I ran back to the stairs but a guard heard me. So I ran even faster I made it to the exit. I stole a car and I was free at last.

3 thoughts on “Wk:7 The Jail Break”

  1. Hi Peter I loved your story but I feel a bit bad for the person you punched and then he died from hitting his head.From Sean.

  2. Hi Peter,

    Thank you for your 100wc entry this week. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it because it was very different to the other stories I have read. It was an original idea about setting the story in a prison. To make your writing even more interesting, could you try using some different starts to your sentences. Maybe using an adverb (suddenly, quickly, unfortunately) every so often would just change the sentences a little.

    Keep working hard with your writing.
    Mrs McG (Team 100wc)
    Derbyshire, England

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