Wk 29; Hide and Seek

It was a cold and misty night.   Me and my brother Jack were playing hide and seek because we thought it would be scary.   I started on, I had to count to 60.  We began at our house.    When 60 was up I started looking for him.   I searched frantically for him and could not find him, then I realized I have not looked in the graveyard yet, when I got there one grave really stood out and it was my brothers name , date of birth  and when he died which was when I finished counting .   When I got home on the halls wall it said in crimson red,  YOUR NEXT.      NOOOOO!!! I shouted

3 thoughts on “Wk 29; Hide and Seek”

  1. HI Ben Q
    I liked your story because it was very interesting and I really liked the ending.
    Keep up the good work.

  3. Wow! I like your use of capital letters Ben. They create IMPACT don’t they. I’m also pleased that kids still like to get out on a misty night to scare themselves by playing hide and see. 🙂
    Be careful with all your spelling won’t you. – ‘you’re’, not your.
    Thanks for sharing,
    Jackie (Team 100WC)
    New Zealand

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