WK 12:The Robot in the white tuxedo

One time in a lab there was an energetic professor who made robots. He was working on a new project called “Robot 362764”. This Robot would wear a white tuxedo and be powered by a battery. While the professor was making this creation he would eat a sandwich every hour. The next day the creation was finished the professor hurried out of his bed ran down stairs into the underground lab and saw him moving he was delighted. He jumped around the place like a mad kangaroo and the Robot just watched. But soon the Robot fell down and broke. The professor just stared and left. He never returned

5 thoughts on “WK 12:The Robot in the white tuxedo”

  1. Isaac, I can understand why the professor never returned – it must have been extremely sad for him to see his creation destroyed. I was trying to work out how many sandwiches the professor ate while making the robot.

  2. Dear Isaac,
    Isaac, I really enjoyed your piece it was really funny! Did you know that batteries can break or crack and release deadly toxins? I too enjoy writing story’s about something that might not actually happen or something that might not happen for a long time. One thing I think you could do to improve your writing is bold the prompt words, it was hard for me to find them.

    Happy writing,
    Keira in Illinois

    Check out my blog at https://kidblog.org/class/rays-1718-pm-rockstars/posts?author=6y8z6x6jtreqjv4mmnxbu0smq&status=published&status=review&status=draft !

  3. Dear Isaac,
    Isaac, I really enjoyed your piece it was really funny! Did you know that batteries can break or crack and release deadly toxins? I too enjoy writing story’s about something that might not actually happen or something that might not happen for a long time. One thing I think you could do to improve your writing is bold the prompt words, it was hard for me to find them. Keep writing!

    Happy writing,
    Keira in Illinois

    Check out my blog at https://kidblog.org/class/rays-1718-pm-rockstars/posts?author=6y8z6x6jtreqjv4mmnxbu0smq&status=published&status=review&status=draft !

  4. I do really like this story and all the details! I like how I can feel the professor’s excitement. I do think that using more punctuation would help the reader (me!) understand the story better- like commas and periods. Good work!

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